It's worth noting that, while you achieve lovely description, you don't quite get to figurative language or actual metaphor. The key is that the comparison doesn't make sense initially. Consider the original, which compares something human/man-made to something in nature. We wouldn't normally think of faces as petals...but it totally works. You know? So what natural thing would you use to help us understand the lava lamp?
It's worth noting that, while you achieve lovely description, you don't quite get to figurative language or actual metaphor. The key is that the comparison doesn't make sense initially. Consider the original, which compares something human/man-made to something in nature. We wouldn't normally think of faces as petals...but it totally works. You know? So what natural thing would you use to help us understand the lava lamp?
ReplyDeleteI have always been mesmerized by lava lamps. The color, light, and the shapes are just so awesome.
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